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i can think of no other time
when i found the rising dawn more beautiful
than a falling midnight
than that morning when we laid amidst a meadow
with flower crowns and ivy hearts
and you whispered dreams into my ear
and held me soft and gentle,

like the lining of a casket.
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ChasMandala Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Well done - the twist at the end is great. It's as if the poem draws you in and then mercilessly spits you back out...:clap:
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Whyles Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :)
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ChasMandala Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome. :nod:
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EvilScarrlett Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
this is wonderful. I love the title you chose.
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Whyles Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :)
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EvilScarrlett Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
you're welcome! ^^
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AurorynDragon Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Wonderful, I liked your use of words. :)
By the way, how are you?
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Whyles Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :)
I'm okay, how are you?
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AurorynDragon Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
No problem. :)
I'm quite okay, except the fact I'm tired like hell because I barely slept last days and I started exams today... But else, I'm okay (still don't know from where I still get the energy to even move). :)
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Whyles Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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AurorynDragon Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:)
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Phantomtigers Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I keep coming back to this poem, it has really stuck in my mind. I hope I can master how you show that you don't need to use many words and can still deliver a large message Clap 
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Whyles Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:D
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darkoc3an Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Nice twist at the end
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Whyles Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. 
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Lissomer Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014  Student Writer
Wow. That last line is so powerful. It changes the entire meaning of what seemed like a whimsical piece. 

I'm actually a little bit in love with this.
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Whyles Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :D
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