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i see my voice curl toward the sky in crystal breaths
as i stand beneath the stars and ask the gods
"where do you fall when you fall in love?"
and in the distant thunder roars as zeus clears his throat.
lightening strikes to start a fire
and in anticipation i sit by the flames as he begins his story.

"love," he says, "is the beautiful medication
that we drink to still our pain,
but often it is overdosed
and we always end up crashing
like a star falling from my sky."

as i watch the shadows dance about his face
aphrodite proudly walks to us
with her golden grace and emerald eyes.
"there's a kingdom," she says with ivory verse, "just below the sea
and it awaits young lovers there
where they drown for all eternity."

at the mention of the sea, poseidon falls down to us
from his chariot atop the cliff and in his booming voice he declares;
"and in that cavern the butterflies are drenched
and with heavy wings they cannot fly
so they suffocate the lovers."

with the quietest gait of a clumsy fox
echo steps forth from the forest
and nervously picks at her gown's hems
with a bright pink flower in her hair.
"don't ever fall in love," she warns and somewhere in the distance
i hear narcissus agree.

and after all the party
had come down from their thrones
and gave each a new account of that thing we all call love,
hades strolls forth with velvet capes and bright red eyes.
in his pleasant voice,
as the hissing of a snake,
he spoke with a poet's heart and said:
"when you fall to love, you fall to me."
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alyssumrox02 Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
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TlCKlNG-CL0CKS Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
WHAT DO YOU WANT
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alyssumrox02 Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
calm down mad woman. it's a very beautiful poem.
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TlCKlNG-CL0CKS Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
ok but please just link it to me instead of mentioning me; i get kinda tired of it when people mention me for no apparent reason or when that one thing has nothing to do with me :I
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alyssumrox02 Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
IT HAS TO DO WITH YOU. I NEED YOU TO READ IT.
have you, btw? wasn't it good?

and yes, I'll take note of that.
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TlCKlNG-CL0CKS Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
how does it have to do with me??
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alyssumrox02 Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
IT'S GOOD.
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TlCKlNG-CL0CKS Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
that's it?
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cvuy Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2014  Student General Artist
aHH IM SORRY I KEEP COMMENTING ON YOUR STUFF BUT THIS IS SUCH A GREAT POEM
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Whyles Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :D
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MaRyS90 Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh my... this is perfect. :heart: I love this. And the ending. So true...
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Whyles Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. c:
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WishfulDandelion Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I love this so hard..
Them feels from hades thoughhh~ <3
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Whyles Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :D
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WishfulDandelion Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
^-^ You're welcome
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rosalina11 Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
Can't help but relate it's kl love this poem x
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Whyles Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you.
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hopeburnsblue Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2014  Professional Writer
Oh wow, the end! It totally threw me for a loop!
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Whyles Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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neenjaah Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2014
I loved the last two lines especially. And the poem itself was beautiful.
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Whyles Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :)
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That1PersonYouForgot Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Awesome story! :thumbsup: I usually have a hard time reading narrative poetry, but this was done well :heart:
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Whyles Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :D
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That1PersonYouForgot Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You are welcome C:
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AurorynDragon Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Aidan... This is beautiful, really, wonderful. :heart:
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Whyles Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :)
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No problem. :hug:
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EvilScarrlett Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
great poem especially the last verse! wonderful ending. :)
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Whyles Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :D
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EvilScarrlett Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
you're welcome! :)
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darkoc3an Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I love this!
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Whyles Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :)
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iceeagle11 Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Wonderful job you've done. It flows nicely and makes sense enough. And the ideals...wow
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Whyles Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :)
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Michel-le-fou Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2014  Professional Writer
You fall into a deep pit and try to escape..but you can't. So you hate.
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